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Diana  Goniou's avatar

Really enjoy reading this. Great craft and gripping story line.

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Paul Dabrowski's avatar

Thank you, Diana. Glad you enjoyed it. Have a great day

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Spencer D.W.'s avatar

I finally got around to reading this! I am sorry it took so long, I'm terribly slow at getting things done.

I love the way this is structured, the intro pulling the strings of questions for me as the reader to wonder about, even the flashback giving some context without being heavy handed exposition. My critism would be solely on the dialog. Just felt a bit stilted, maybe more contractions can help it sound a bit more natural.

I loved the how the tension was set. In the elevator it is clear which way it was going but left enough wiggle room to wonder.

I very much enjoyed it!

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Paul Dabrowski's avatar

lol...I know all about getting things done on hte slow side. I have the same problem. Thanks for the review. Glad you enjoyed it. I'll have to go back and look at the dialog. So thanks for pointing it out.

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Jason Duck's avatar

A good spooky read- enjoyed this very much.

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Paul Dabrowski's avatar

Thanks, Jason. Glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for reading

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Paul Dabrowski's avatar

Glad you enjoyed. I don't do to much horror anymore but I was thinking of getting back into it. Have a great day

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